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A scene of dry, barren lands,
stretched between us
is all that remains
of a never quite forgotten memory.

A young man fleeing
from every unrequited love,
but those, too,
were misperceived.
He's trying to bury his secrets
before they're uncovered,
but he didn't dig deep enough first.

The cemetery for pasts
that were buried too shallow.
A dark painting,
and it's etched into my mind.
Too many lives are lost
among the epitaphs here.

A little girl with inadequate responses
that were never quite enough.
With shovel in hand, she digs,
unearthing just one or two broken promises
and just one or two more broken hearts.


You promised.

You promised. (It's too late now.)

You promised
and you lied,
but I just kept making music,
even though no one was dancing anymore.
©2004-2009 ~echoedlaughter
:iconechoedlaughter:

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My gallery is full of one picture that I can't get out of my head.

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:icongreeneggsandham:
Excellent, really excellent. Wow it's been a long time since I've read any quality poetry, but this.... wonderful. It flows and hints and lingers.....*sigh* excellent.

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"Momento, homo, quia pulvis es, et in pulverem revertis"
'Remember, man, thou art dust, and unto dust thou shalt return'
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:iconceltic-rain:
Wow. This is so pretty. it's so full of emotion. The poetry i've been reading lately is all about the word play, and less about the emotion.. this one hit me hard. Definetely going to go on thru your gallery... :tears: <sniff> <wanders off in a daze, mumbling to herself>

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Proud member of ~livingpoetsociety, *penpushers, ~DemonZelda, =pagantribalart and supporter of *inner-space

Revolutionize!
:iconheatherlovatt:
Heh. Come read my poems then. (Course, you have to travel offworld to do this, or travel to other webs, here at dA. But no matter. I'm not here to advertise, I'm here to enjoy poems.

And I so enjoy this one. It has a lovely close touch to it. Well worn thinkings, but not overdone.

good for you. Why so few poems here?

Thanks.

Heaher
:iconcelestiality:
a beautiful story, and so very sad. you did well to evoke emotion from reader :P
the only thing critical i can think of to say is that the flow of the second stanza is a bit more disjointed than the rest, apart from that, it really is a great piece.

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searching for some sane thought in this sombre scream

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